Don’t Stop Believing

Don’t Stop Believing

Times may come where you’ll feel dark in despair

There’s a challenge to find a candle that’s lit

However, believe in your strength and be aware

That you are capable of a great mind and wit

In your brokenness you will find repair

And be put back together bit by bit

Life is a large pie and we experience only a bit

Let’s not waste time flooded in our own despair

But feel joy of the company of others and their wit

It can be a difficult thing to try to be aware

When you’re searching for that candle of hope to be lit

However, even in obscurity, you’ll always find repair

There’s the beauty of the spirit that’ll give you repair

The spirit of hope that we sometimes see bit by bit

It lifts up our soul in these times of despair

Using our mind, body, and souls, and especially our wit

Take time to look out over the horizon and be aware

Of the spectacular sun that makes the mountains lit

In the sun I can see all my dreams become lit

I feel whole and complete; no need of repair

I’ve been replenished with optimism every single bit

The power of joy has vanquished all my despair

Leaving nothing left but purity and wit

Understanding this feeling of faith I’ll always be aware

No matter what life tosses at me I’ll always be aware

Of the ray of heaven that keeps my soul beautifully lit

With no knowledge of the dreaded word despair

Nothing left of it; not even a tiny bit

I press my hand to my heart; with every beat it’s repaired

And I gently laugh at my gaiety and my wit

Believe in yourself and believe in your wit

Keep your passion alive and always be aware

That in every type of darkness there’s a candle to be lit

And no matter how many pieces you are in there’ll always be repaired

You will be put back together; every little bit

Never again will you have the fear of despair

Hold on to yourself and keep faith to your wit

Stay true to yourself and keep yourself aware

Don’t stop believing; not one little bit

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6 Responses to “Don’t Stop Believing”

  1. A beautiful sentiment, and very inspiring. Poet of Midnight, your work always seems to really speak to me!

    • Thank you!!!

  2. Times may come where you’ll feel dark in despair (10)

    There’s a challenge to find a candle that’s lit (11)

    However, believe in your strength and be aware (12)

    That you are capable of a great mind and wit (11)

    In your brokenness you will find repair (10)

    And be put back together bit by bit (10)

    Life is a large pie and we experience only a bit (14)

    Let’s not waste time flooded in our own despair (11)

    But feel joy of the company of others and their wit (14)

    It can be a difficult thing to try to be aware (14)

    When you’re searching for that candle of hope to be lit (13)

    However, even in obscurity, you’ll always find repair (16)

    There’s the beauty of the spirit that’ll give you repair (14)

    The spirit of hope that we sometimes see bit by bit (13)

    It lifts up our soul in these times of despair (11)

    Using our mind, body, and souls, and especially our wit (15)

    Take time to look out over the horizon and be aware (15)

    Of the spectacular sun that makes the mountains lit (13)

    In the sun I can see all my dreams become lit (12)

    I feel whole and complete; no need of repair (11)

    I’ve been replenished with optimism every single bit (15)

    The power of joy has vanquished all my despair (12)

    Leaving nothing left but purity and wit (11)

    Understanding this feeling of faith I’ll always be aware (15)

    No matter what life tosses at me I’ll always be aware (15)

    Of the ray of heaven that keeps my soul beautifully lit (15)

    With no knowledge of the dreaded word despair (11)

    Nothing left of it; not even a tiny bit (12)

    I press my hand to my heart; with every beat it’s repaired (14)

    And I gently laugh at my gaiety and my wit (13)

    Believe in yourself and believe in your wit (11)

    Keep your passion alive and always be aware (12)

    That in every type of darkness there’s a candle to be lit (16)

    And no matter how many pieces you are in there’ll always be repaired (18)

    You will be put back together; every little bit

    Never again will you have the fear of despair (12)

    Hold on to yourself and keep faith to your wit (12)

    Stay true to yourself and keep yourself aware (11)

    Don’t stop believing; not one little bit (10)

    • Thank you, this is very detailed feedback.

  3. I notice you are using the changing endings that always end in either despair, bit, wit, or aware.

    Although I like the poem, the rhythm is extremely jerky.

    Once upon a midnight dreary, (8) while I pondered weak and weary(8),
    Over many a quaint and curious volume of forgotten lore,(odd ball)
    While I nodded(4), nearly napping(4), suddenly there came a tapping(8),
    As of some one gently rapping(8), rapping at my chamber door(7).
    `’Tis some visitor,’ I muttered(8), `tapping at my chamber door(7) –
    Only this, and nothing more.(7)’

    The repetition of the syllables, and of course, the use of stressed and unstressed syllables make Edgar Allen Poe’s The Raven very musical. I think your poem would benefit a lot from this kind of attention to rhythm.

  4. This poem was meant to be a Sestina. I think I was so focused on getting the rhyme scheme that I had not considered rhythm. I have been trying to have a stronger focus on that in writing because I typically only focus on vivid imagery. Thank you so much for visiting my blog and for the terrific feedback. I will be sure to visit your blog soon.

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