Ocean Walls

Ocean Walls

Pushing past the ocean walls to the world above
Your hair molds together thicker than seaweed.
If only I could reach my hand out to you my love

Your finger tips are fairer than the feather of a dove
Water glistens on your skin, falling down in beads
Pushing past the ocean walls to the world above

The waves continue to give your a shove
Keeping me from following your lead
If only I could reach my hand out to you my love

You fit over my heart as smooth as a glove
I saw you and knew you were all I need
Pushing past the ocean walls to the world above

All bitterness I ever felt your love got rid of
I gave my soul over; I fulfilled the deed
If only I could reach my hand out to you my love

Now you are in heaven; weightless as a dove
My only wish was to follow your lead
Pushing past the ocean walls to the world above
If only I could reach my hand out to you my love

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8 Responses to “Ocean Walls”

  1. I love the line “You fit over my heart as smooth as a glove.” Beautiful, and original. I’m sick of all the age-old cliched lines that some poets use to squeak by with a rhyme. This keeps up a good flow both in rhyme and rhythm, really nice work ❤

    • Thank you so much! I was grinning ear to ear when I found out that someone responded to my writing. I was a bit nervous about this poem because I don’t ususally write in a villanelle poem form. Thanks for being my first comment!!!

  2. a wonderful piecee of poetry very nice from kevin in hampshire uk.

    your other pieces are lovely too.

  3. This poem creates some very nice images, very rich! I’ve enjoyed visiting your blog…

  4. Again so graphic it hurts to read. beautiful.

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