Ocean Walls
Ocean Walls
Pushing past the ocean walls to the world above
Your hair molds together thicker than seaweed.
If only I could reach my hand out to you my love
Your finger tips are fairer than the feather of a dove
Water glistens on your skin, falling down in beads
Pushing past the ocean walls to the world above
The waves continue to give your a shove
Keeping me from following your lead
If only I could reach my hand out to you my love
You fit over my heart as smooth as a glove
I saw you and knew you were all I need
Pushing past the ocean walls to the world above
All bitterness I ever felt your love got rid of
I gave my soul over; I fulfilled the deed
If only I could reach my hand out to you my love
Now you are in heaven; weightless as a dove
My only wish was to follow your lead
Pushing past the ocean walls to the world above
If only I could reach my hand out to you my love
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I love the line “You fit over my heart as smooth as a glove.” Beautiful, and original. I’m sick of all the age-old cliched lines that some poets use to squeak by with a rhyme. This keeps up a good flow both in rhyme and rhythm, really nice work ❤
Mattie J. said this on August 3, 2011 at 12:43 am |
Thank you so much! I was grinning ear to ear when I found out that someone responded to my writing. I was a bit nervous about this poem because I don’t ususally write in a villanelle poem form. Thanks for being my first comment!!!
poetofmidnight said this on August 3, 2011 at 1:55 am |
a wonderful piecee of poetry very nice from kevin in hampshire uk.
your other pieces are lovely too.
4valentines4words4poetry4you said this on August 6, 2011 at 5:28 am |
Thank you very much for reading! I’m glad you think my poems are lovely.
poetofmidnight said this on August 6, 2011 at 10:19 pm |
This poem creates some very nice images, very rich! I’ve enjoyed visiting your blog…
unsungpoet said this on August 12, 2011 at 4:16 am |
Thank you and I hope you come again soon.
poetofmidnight said this on August 13, 2011 at 9:24 pm |
Again so graphic it hurts to read. beautiful.
willowdot21 said this on September 2, 2011 at 2:50 pm |
Thank you, I appreciate your comment!
poetofmidnight said this on September 2, 2011 at 9:30 pm |